Is it just me or the "Appearance" section doesn't look right ? Like, what is a "lean belt" ? Did you mean a "lean man" instead ?
And also, what's with all the "while" at the beginning of each sentence ?
For instance, the "while his clothes seem to be made of the same fabric as Ayla's, consisting of grey fur" doesn't look right, putting a "while" at the start of a sentence implies that you're gonna make a comparison between two things (like when you say "while A looks better than B, I prefer the latter"), but here it's not the case. So what do you think the person who wrote this meant ?
And finally, why use the preterit form of wear in "He also wore a tunic that goes down to his upper legs" ?